Wednesday, February 8, 2012

Can you write like a fifth grader?

A fifth grader's opening paragraph from a biography of his father:

His hands felt numb as he strummed the strings harder and harder until he got the right tune, a soft hum to match the best of the music that flowed from the shiny black stereo next to him. 

He looked at the notes on the fading piece of paper and began the song, his friend Kevin stomping to the beat and clapping for him.

Ever since Tom O. was born, on November 9, 1967, he had loved to play guitar.


Vicki Palmquist said...

Displaying the soul of a writer. Thanks for sharing this, Barbara.

Leslie Davis Guccione said...

Wonderful example!

Annie McMahon said...

Wow!! I'm very impressed! Future bestseller author, for sure, whoever wrote that!

And I love the picture you chose to go with that post. Children are masters at expressing emotions. We have much to learn from them.

Heather Vogel Frederick said...

Oh. My. Goodness. Wowza! Do you love this kid or what? Thanks for posting this gem.