Monday, September 17, 2007

Before and After

Rough draft of first paragraph of Because of Winn Dixie by Kate DiCamillo (exactly as written):

TWO ONIONS, FOUR GALRIC [sic] BULBS SERENDIPITY AND A DOG NAMED WINN DIXIE my dog's name is winn dixie on account of that is where i found him. he was in the produce department and you know they don't like dogs mixed in with the fruit and vegetables. the produce manager, he was all excited, waving his arms around and chasing winn dixie, screaming, "that dirty dog. who let that dirty dog in here?"

As published:

My name is India Opal Buloni, and last summer my daddy, the preacher, sent me to the store for a box of macaroni-and-cheese, some white rice, and two tomatoes and I came back with a dog. This is what happened: I walked into the produce section of the Winn-Dixie grocery store to pick out my two tomatoes and I almost bumped right into the store manager. He was standing there all red-faced, screaming and waving his arms around.

"Who let a dog in here? he kept on shouting. "Who let a dirty dog in here?"

From "Drafts as models of craft: Ten things learned about Kate DiCamillo", by Sandra Imdieke; The Dragon Lode; Volume 25; Spring 2007
Draft courtesy of the Children's Literature Research Collection; University of Minnesota; Kate DiCamillo
And "Because of Winn Dixie" by Kate DiCamillo; Candlewick Press; 2000


Sarah Miller said...

Do you have any idea what this means to a person mired in rough draft hell?

Barbara O'Connor said...

Yeah, I can dig it - I'm in hell with you.