Thud?

Travis yanked a small green cantaloupe off a tangled vine beside the birdbath and tossed it toward the porch. It landed on the walkway with a thud.

Huh?

A thud?

Note to self: change thud to splat

Sheesh....

But then, on second thought, a green cantaloupe might go thud instead of splat....

Note to self: Just get on with the story, wouldya?

Note to self again: Too bad it's not summer. What a great diversion I would have running outside to toss cantaloupes on the walkway.

Children's Literature Network

For all you authors and illustrators out there, if you're not familiar with Children's Literature Network - head over that way immediately - and join!

They are major supporters of children's literature.

They are passionate about children's books.

They are wonderful folks.

Just do it.

Playing with words

So I was fiddling around with a small section of my WIP today and enjoying "listening" to the difference between two versions, based on verb tense.

Here's the version I wrote first (and which I like best - and which came out naturally):

And so it began. Owen and Travis and Stumpy and Viola maneuvering the submarine down to the pond. Owen and Stumpy pulling on the ropes. Travis and Viola scrambling to the rear of the submarine to pull out a pipe and carry it back around to the front. Inch by inch... ...foot by foot... ...yard by yard... ...they rolled the Water Wonder 4000 closer and closer to Graham Pond.

Now, I don't know what the heck you call those words, "maneuvering", "pulling", and "scrambling."

Present progressive pluperfect gerundian participlized verbs?

Beuller?

Anybody?

But then, for the heck of it, I decided to try the same thing but change the verb form to past tense.

So that I had:

And so it began. Owen and Travis and Stumpy and Viola maneuvered the submarine down to the pond. Owen and Stumpy pulled on the ropes. Travis and Viola scrambled to the rear of the submarine, etc.

But it doesn't sound as good to me.

It sort of loses the "drama" of the moment or something.

Or maybe it's just me.

But I find it so interesting how word choice affects mood.

In the name of science

For those of you who wanted to know....

...laundry detergent does freeze if you leave it in your car overnight in 18 degree weather.

And frozen laundry detergent does expand.

And expanded laundry detergent, well....

....you get the picture.

Don't say this blog isn't educational.

Pant, pant, pant

Ten pages today!

Ten pretty clean pages!

My brain has now officially shut down so I'm packing it in for the day.

I feel so triumphant.

But now I'll lose some steam due to a school visit tomorrow, Thursday and Friday.

Am missing my critique group on Wednesday (which I HATE doing) to grab some more hours (with yet another vet appointment with Phoebe in the middle of the day. I know, I know...sheesh.)

Small Graces

It's auction time again!

Now's your chance to own one of Grace Lin's lovely paintings and benefit the Foundation for Children's Books at the same time.

Such a deal!

Writing Fairies Continued

I thought of another example of how the Writing Fairy pays a surprise visit to your story and throws a monkey wrench into the flow - which turns out to be a good thing.

In Me and Rupert Goody, I was writing along and all of a sudden a sentence popped into the story about Rupert repairing a hotplate for Uncle Beau.

I hadn't planned that.

I hadn't thought about that.

I had absolutely no idea where that hotplate came from or, more important, why the heck it was there.

AND THEN.....

......the climax of the story turns out to come when Uncle Beau's store burns down.

Why did Uncle Beau's store burn down, you ask?

BECAUSE OF THE HOTPLATE!

Dang, that Fairy is pretty smart.

(P.S. I fixed that link to Sara Lewis Holmes's blog entry that was referenced here, in case you missed it.)

Writing Fairies

I saved this blog entry by Sara Lewis Holmes because I thought it was so well written and I totally GET it.

I find it so strange and fascinating when something happens while we are writing that is totally unexpected.

And even more fun is when the unexpected thing is annoying - stops your story in its tracks - messes up your plans.

It's like this little cosmic Writing Fairy swooping down to throw dust on your story and at first you get all mad and say "Stop that, you're messing up my story"....

....but then you end up saying, "Gee, thanks, you made my story better!"

Example:

In The Small Adventure of Popeye and Elvis, the two main characters (Popeye and Elvis, duh) have been trying and trying and trying to convince Starletta to show them the place where dead dogs live. (I can't explain that, you just have to read the story. And trust me, no dogs are killed in this book.)

She FINALLY tells them that she will show them on Wednesday.

They can hardly wait.

Wednesday comes and they dash over to Starletta's. (Note: the "wings" referred to in the passage are these scruffy butterfly wings that Starletta wears.)


Popeye followed Elvis to the backyard and let out a sigh of relief when he saw Starletta hopping down the porch steps, wings aflapping.

Elvis didn’t waste a minute. “Today’s Wednesday,” he said. “Show us the dead dogs.”

Starletta looked him square in the eye and said, “No.”


Now - when I wrote that, I was totally, completely unprepared for Starletta to say no!!

I had PLANNED for her to show them.

But she just up and said that!

I was so shocked.

It stopped me dead in my tracks.

I'm sitting at my desk and thinking, "Well, NOW what do I do?"

My Writing Fairy had tossed that dust down there onto my paper and completely caught me off guard.

Isn't that strange and fun and fascinating?

AND - the best part is that, naturally, it made the story better because the reader wasn't expecting that to happen either - so I'm keeping 'em guessing.

Ha!

A book in one sentence

You know how "they" tell you that you should be able to describe your book in one sentence?

Well, I've always said pish posh to that. (Maybe because I can never do it. Heh...)

But then when you read those one-sentence Library of Congress descriptions for books, you realize that it can be done - at least by somebody.

Here's the one sentence description of The Small Adventure of Popeye and Elvis (Fall 2009):

In Fayette, South Carolina, the highlight of Popeye's summer is learning vocabulary words with his grandmother until a motor home gets stuck nearby and Elvis, the oldest boy living inside, joins Popeye in finding the source of strange boats floating down the creek.


Dang! That's pretty good!

And I thought it couldn't be done...

Slow and steady wins the race

Chapter 21.

Making progress....

...one word at a time.

I guess this dang snow is good for something.

P.S. Okay, I confess....these are short chapters.

Let me clarify fingernails

You know that Scholastic Book Fair video of mine?

Well, I was watching it (again..... yeah, yeah, I know....) and I was noticing that part where some gal's hand comes up holding money....

I just want to clarify...for the record....THAT IS NOT MY HAND, PEOPLE!

Those nails!

Ohmygosh!

I am 58 years old.

I have never....in all my 58 years....had a manicure.

I will never have a manicure.

I could care less about fingernails.

I like to garden.

I never wear gardening gloves.

I LIKE the feel of dirt.

I often have dirt under my fingernails.

I just wanted to clarify that so I don't disappoint anyone if they ever meet me in person and expect that I have those nice fingernails.

Good grief

You know you love your dogs when you find yourself shoveling snow in the back yard.

Where's my Motrin?

An interesting observation

The other day I was doing a writing workshop with fifth graders.

We were on the final day and the students were reading a paragraph of their chapters out loud to the class.

I always like to stand behind them so I can see their papers while they read. (I know it probably annoys the heck out of them, but, hey, I'm the boss, right?)

A rather shy boy was reading a paragraph of a biography of his grandfather.

I could tell this boy struggled a bit with writing, but he had really listened during the workshop and had tried to use some of the techniques we had discussed.

When he was reading a sentence that was a description of his grandfather as a young boy, what he read out loud was that his grandfather had "blue eyes."

What he had written on the paper was that his grandfather had "ocean blue eyes."

I found it fascinating that he had omitted the word "ocean" when he read out loud.

Now, I'm no psychiatrist or anything, but I think that he was embarrassed to read what he might have considered to be "pretty" writing.

(Dare I go out on a limb and say "girly" writing?")

Hmmmm, I wonder.

Not quite ready for the Oscars

So, remember when I made that Scholastic Book Fair video?

Here it is! (And don't laugh....I tried, really....I tried.)

And while you're at it, check out Danette Haworth's video, too.

My bad memory earns money

Remember when I bought that tablecloth on eBay and then realized I already had that one?

Well, guess what?

I put it back on eBay and just sold it for $10 more than I paid for it!

Ha!

My senility could be quite lucrative financially!