Check out this piece of writing from a fourth grade writing workshop I recently taught.
The students were writing paragraphs that show setting (instead of telling the setting).
This one was the back of a crowded school bus on a rainy day.
She ran through puddles and splashed onto the first step of the bus. When she made it to the back, she flopped onto a seat and pulled off her soggy hat.
"I didn't expect it to rain today," she muttered.
Her friend tromped onto the bus and plopped down next to her. The bus was starting to fill up. The air smelled like wet rubber from the kids' rain boots.
"I can't wait until I can get off!" she said to her friend.